I know you're trying.
You have a good song here, but it is too repetitive and the first tune that sounds like all lead-ish and dry is to 'naked' without any other sound effects, it also just doesn't sound like it fits. Try another sound effect or something. I do like the end beats and rythym stuff at the end tho! Keep it up, I know it's hard to sit there and compile these songs (I would know, lol), but... yeah. U Kan Dew it!
~Kromeclutch